I.
now just a minute stop right there.
I don’t know you but don’t say a word.
shut the door. stay here.
hey what’s that sound?
zydeco?
it’s awkward, but almost stimulating.
keep it coming
II.
one summer from Chicago
with their hands in the busy wallflowers
they knew everything
How dare you speak negatively of my voice? haha jk.
ReplyDeleteIt's hard to "judge" your work because they are mostly found and arranged words that came from so many different places. Next time use am instead of fm...make sure you jot down commercials...you get the idea. I do, however, like the vocabulary you happen to find (wallflowers, stimulating, zydeco) but then again that's not a compliment to you either, ha. Keep it up, I enjoyed these two shorter ones.
"speak negatively of your voice?' haha idk what you meant by that?"
ReplyDeleteI'm gonna come off as an ass here but I really don't think the "judgability" of poetry/art is relevant. for me art is like energy, it is never created nor destroyed, but it can be "channeled"- this poetry is not "mine" in the sense that it is me, but because I took part in the "channeling" of it, I can put my name on it. i admit the words that are used to describe that idea sound cheesy if not entirely pompous, but I think that is part of the nature of language- it always comes short. and that is part of the reason I choose to work with "conceptual poetry" that involves procedures.. instead of trying to make the words describe something I "want" them to describe, I let the words sort of direct me. as for my radio procedure, i do use both am and fm everytime, I go up AM down FM, and do it again. as I scan i write down commercials and anything I hear but when it comes time to arrange them i do as much omitting and combining as necessary.
That second section ("one summer from Chicago, etc.") is fantastic. These are all great.
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